Final Polish

December 9, 2012

English 1A

To: Whom May It Concern to

Dear Audience,

In this letter I will talk about my purpose of this argument towards both genders of the opposite sex having to go through the disrespectful ads and men treating women as objects. These ads can affect women, men, and girls at a very young age. These advertising ads can hurt women emotionally and physically whether they are just perfume ads, fast food ads, clothing ads, exec.  They can also give a big impact on female teenagers from being a girl to their beginnings of becoming a woman. The media portrays women as if they were available at the whim of men. It also portrays women as a commodity, or a valuable object or “thing”. As with men, they are not being portrayed respectfully. Men are mostly put as someone “though, powerful, and hot” in these kinds of ads.

Advertisement ads such as the modeling ads or fashion ads can be a big impact on teens. Teens start to think that it is okay to be extremely skinny in order to fit into a size pants zero or double zero. Due to these ads they believe they look beautiful and that that’s the way they should look like in order for a guy to like them. According to a film that the teacher Winnie bear from my English 100 class last semester showed in class “Killing Us Softly” by Jean Kilboune that women in magazine, and advertisement ads shows women with no wrinkles , lines, pimples, and etc. do not seem to look like that. Advertisers make up the person in the ads.  The person they take pictures of is not the 100% full image of that person. Advertisers grab parts of other images they have taken from other women and mix them up in one single ad. If a woman comes out a bit chubby than they imagined, they make her thinner in order to hide her real size. Ads show thin women with big breasts and a big behind. Such as the ad shown on the video “Does You Husband Wish You Had Bigger Breast”?  This ad was proving that men love women with big breast and that women who have small breast should change their appearance in order to look attractive to them.  This means that these ads are  sham. Teens at a very young age tend to spend time, energy and money in order to look “beautiful” just like the women on these ads. Advertisers do not realize that these kinds of ads can affect teens in a detrimental physical and emotional way (as attempting to lose weight rapidly can cause stress and various other health problems).

I rremember having a  friend in my elementary school, she was 11 years old with an eating disorder, She would not eat because she was afraid of gaining weight. She thought she would not be liked and because she would not look beautiful. She was extremely skinny to a point where she had fainted during class. Her parents would take her to the hospital but she would still not eat. Her parents would force her but she would just ignore them. She would starve herself almost every day, all day. I once asked her why she would not eat. She had replied to me “I want look just like a model just like in one of those magazine ads.”

Advertisement ads and violence can hurt women physically and mentally in every way.  Advertising ads with a man pulling the woman’s hair or a man surrounded by beautiful women, such as, those perfume ads for men can be a way of a women being hurt.  According to the text “Two Ways a Woman Can Get hurt” shows that advertisements such as an ad with a woman in just a bra and underwear is considered a “bitch or slut” to a man.  Also a woman just showing a little skin is also consider sexy, attractive but also bitches to men. In the text, an advertisement of this kind leads to women being raped and killed. Most women are killed by the bare hands of their partners due to these ads. It also shows that women are men’s bitches and that they have to listen to them and does not receives a “no” as an answer. This means that women don’t have a right to talk or do what they want. These kinds of ads also give a bad impression of women. This again, showing how women are seen as a commodity that is easy to attain and available for men, and that women are at men’s disposition.

Advertisement ads with men do not give a bad impression on them. In fact, in these ads they show men as being strong, handsome, sexy and skinny with abs.  The media portrays men as the rulers of society. Men are the providers. Men are the strong. Men are superior. And women? Women are dependents. Women are weak. Women are inferior. In advertisement ads, men are not judged about their appearance but how they should be like. Society believes the media, but yet it does not really know the full, true message that the media is trying to portray.

Advertisement ads of any kind are a bad influence on men, women, and teens. They also gives bad impressions towards the opposite sex. Advertisements can hurt physically and mentally. Women of all ages are being oppressed with constant propaganda and advertising ads on a regular basis. The ads in the media will affect both sexes negatively. The media will continue to express the message of superiority and inferiority, and it will continue to foster and mentor the oppressor to continue oppressing the oppressed.

Sincerely,

Sylvia Alvarez

Bibliography

Kilbourne.Jean.”Killing US softly 3.” You Tube.2006.Web.3 Dec.2012 <http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_FpyGwP3yzE >

Kilbourne. Jean. “Two ways a woman can get hurt: Advertising and Violence.” Rereading America. Eighth Edition.

Rough Draft #2

December 1, 2012

To: Whom May It Concern to

Dear Audience,

In this letter I will talk about my purpose of this argument towards both genders of the opposite sex having to go through the disrespectful ads and men treating women as objects. These ads can affect women, men, and teen girls. These advertising ads can hurt women emotionally and physically whether they are just perfume ads, fast food ads, clothing ads, exec.  They can also give a big impact on female teenagers from being a girl to their beginnings of becoming a woman. As with men, they are not being portrayed respectfully. Men are mostly put as someone “though, powerful, and hot” in these kinds of ads.

Advertisement ads such as the modeling ads or fashion ads can be a big impact on teens. Teens start to think that it is okay to be extremely skinny in order to fit into a size pants zero or double zero. Due to these ads they believe they look beautiful and that that’s the way they should look like in order for a guy to like them. According to a film that the teacher Winnie bear from my English 100 class last semester showed in class “Killing Us Softly” by Jean Kilboune that women in magazine, and advertisement ads shows women with no wrinkles , lines, pimples, and etc. don’t seem to look like that. Advertisers make up the person in the ad.  The person they took pictures of is not the 100% full image of that person. Advertisers grab parts of other images they have taken from other women and mix them up in one single ad. If a woman comes out a bit chubby that they imagined, they make her thinner in order to hide her real size. Ads show thin women with big breasts and big behind.  This means that these ads are fake. Teens at a very young age tend to spend time, energy and money in order to look beautiful just like the women on these ads. Advertisers do not realize that these kinds of ads can affect teens in a very physical way.

A friend I had in my elementary school, she was 11 years old and with eating disorders. She was afraid of gaining weight because she thought she would not be liked and because she would not look beautiful. She was extremely skinny to a point where she had fainted during class. Her parents would take her to the hospital but she would still not eat. Her parents would force her but she would just ignore them. She would starve herself almost every day, all day. I once asked her why she would not eat. She had replied to me “I want look just like a model just like in one of those magazine ads.”

Advertisement ads and violence can hurt women physically and mentally in every way.  Advertising ads with a man pulling the woman’s hair or a man surrounded by beautiful women, such as, those perfume ads for men can be a way of a women being hurt.  According to the text “Two Ways a Woman Can Get hurt” shows that advertisements such as an ad with a woman in just a bra and underwear is consider a “bitch or slut” to a man.  Also a woman just showing a little skin is also consider sexy, attractive but also bitches to men. In the text, an advertisement of this kind leads to women being raped and killed. Most women are killed by the bare hands of their partners due to these ads. It also shows that women are men’s bitches and that they have to listen to them and does not receives a “no” as an answer. This means that women don’t have a right to talk or do what they want. These kinds of ads also give a bad impression on women.

Advertisement ads with men do not give a bad impression on them. In fact, in these ads they show men as being strong, handsome, sexy and skinny with abs. They also show that they own women and won’t take a “no” for an answer. As I seen in advertisement ads, men are not judged about their appearance but how they should be like.

Advertisement ads of any kind are a bad influence on men women and teens. They also it gives bad impressions towards the opposite sex. Advertisements can hurt physically and mentally. Women of all ages are being oppressed with constant propaganda and advertising ads on a regular basis. These ads are not good only for women but also for men.

Annotated Bibliographies #2

Michael Kimmel, " The guy code". Read reading America: cultural and contexts for critical thinking and writing. University of New York. Eight Edition.

In this article, Kimmel explains how men are suppose to follow the four basic rules of  masculinity. He also explains that the masculinity starts by a parent or a older brother in the family. Men also tend to hide their feelings behind the "straight jacket."  The guy code is a collection of behaviors, values, and traits that tells what it means to be a man. Men can not show any sissy stuff. Such as, crying, showing feelings, and weakness.

Jean Kilbourne, " Two Ways a Women Can Get Hurt". Read reading America: cultural and contexts for critical thinking and writing. Eight Edition. 

The article, " Two Ways a Women Can Get Hurt," by Jean Kilbourne, talks about how advertising ads can affect a women physically and mentally. Kilbourne explains about women being raped and killed because of these ads. The majority of these women are  killed by the hands of their partner. These ads show that women are only meant to be "slaves, bitches, and sluts" to men. Kilbourne shows that violence  and advertising ads can   affect women in every single way.

Proposal #2

Title: Men and Women of this society

Author: Sylvia Alvarez

Date: November 18, 2012

Topic: The Prospects of women in the old days.

Analysis of Argument

Exigence: Different ways in that the society can gain respect towards the male and female gender

Intended audience: General Public

Purpose: To show readers that women can do the same jobs, and other activities as men.

Claim(s): Women deserve to have the same opportunity that men have.

Main Evidence: Trough -out the time, women have been proved that women are capable of doing the same jobs as men. They have proven that we as women can do much more in order to improve and become much bigger in the society.

Rhetorical Analysis:

Writer's Strategy 1: (Ethos)Women are meant to have the same equality as men in jobs, sports and other activities. Now women are accepted to work in companies, schools,stores, and etc.

Writer's Strategy 2: ( Logos)  In the old times, women were not allowed to work, They were meant to stay home to clean, take care of the children, etc,  while the men went to work. Women were  not accepted to work  because men thought they could not do the same job that a man could. Through out the years, women had started working. Women became the best workers than men for their brains and hard working. Now men and women have the same equality to any work.

Writer's  Strategy 3: ( Pathos) As a women,I have been told that women should not be doing the job that a man do at my job. Women are not allowed to carry heavy boxes even though they are 10 pounds. Women are suppose to do lighter things. Such as, clean the product,and maintain the place clean.

Rhetorical Analysis #3

Title: " Bros Before hos": The Guy Code

Author: Michael Kimmel


    In the article " Bros Before hos," the author Michael Kimmel explains how men should be in today's society.  Kimmel also discusses how men are being treated if they show their feelings towards anything that will consider them being a sissy. As the  guy code means no sissy stuff. Being a man means not being a sissy, not perceiving as weak, effeminate, or gay (609). It also means " Be a big wheel," " Be a sturdy Oak," and "Give them hell." Most of the men are shown in their homes by their parents, a older brother, or a cousin.
    As in my experience, I have seen my younger brother trying to act tough and not showing any strong emotions that will consider him a sissy when he is surrounded by his friends. In the other hand, my boyfriend doesn't have any problems of showing any feeling towards anything because he was thought that if he fall he could get back on his feet...and it could be a lesson learned for another hard obstacle.  
   If men are using the guy code, It would be hard for someone to keep everything inside. Feelings, for example, if they show these they are consider a sissy, but what  if they are tired of following the "the guy code"? Men hide all those feelings behind that " straight jacket".

Rhetorical Analysis #2

Title: The Death of Macho
Author: Reihan Salam
Date: 2008
Topic: The era of male dominance in the employment and the economic finance is decreasing and male are becoming unemployed while women are being employed.

Analysis of Argument:

Exigence: Salam discusses how the suggestion of macho men is being faded out in today's society with unemployed men. Because of this, Salam believes there is two choices that could be made, adaption or confront today's society.     

Intended Audience: Anyone who is involved in finance. 

Purpose: To show how males on families are being changed in today's society.

Claim(s): "The era of male dominance is becoming to an end. For years, the world has been witnessing a quiet but monumental shift of power from men to women (629)."

Main Evidence: In the article, Salam explains how macho men are being unemployed more in today's society than before. According to the U.S. Bureau of Labor Statistics, 80 percent of job losses in the United States had unemployed men since November . Europe also has the same economy percentage of unemployed men in today's society, but Europe is about 7 million more of unemployed men before the recession. Putting these two countries together, the total of unemployed macho men are 28 million out of worldwide. This means that men are being replaced by women in today's society for work. 


Rhetorical Analysis:

Writer's Strategy 1: (Ethos) The author uses strong fact and terms to help the reader understand the author's point of view towards this subject. 

Writer's Strategy 2: (Logos) Salam points out on the article that the role of men from today's society had changed after the recession. Women stopped being housewives and began to be involved in work.

Writer's Strategy 3: (Pathos) Salam uses powerful language on the article,but it shows the reader a little  emotion towards this text.

Reader Effect #1: The author’s attitude made the reader accept as true what the author was talking about and made the reader view the author’s point of view toward this issue.


Reader Effect #2: The author’s powerful facts helped to reader comprehend the text of the macho men crisis.

Reader Effect #3: The author did not use a lot of emotional connection to the reader in this article, but the facts that the author gave were enough for the reader to understand.
 
Response: I agree with Reihan Salam because in today's society there is more female in work than men. Although the global of economic of macho men is coming to an end, men can still work on their desirable career. Therefore, I agree with Salam due to the loss of macho men in today’s society.

Reader Response #2

   In the article," Two Ways a Woman Can Get Hurt": Advertising and Violence, by Jean Kilbourne talks about how women are being compared to products on advertising ads to show how the "perfect and attractive girl" for a man should look like. Each advertising ad explains what it means. Some advertising ads show that women are good for only one thing, sex and the other show violence towards women. Also how woman are consider a man's b**Ch.  One example, a picture of an ad on the article shows a woman with her hair being pulled by a handsome man. 

   Each advertising ad can mean a lot of things. An example is the jean advertisement saying "Wear it out and make it scream," with a man sliding his hands under a women's transparent shirt. It could mean seduction or could be an easy attack towards women. Advertisements are made every day. Most to get our attention on products, but they don’t think that advertising ads for women can us in so many ways.

    According to Antonia Novello, the images we see on advertisement ads become numbed to us, just as we become numbed to daily news of women being raped, battered and killed. Most women are killed by the hands of their husband or boyfriend. This means that advertisements of this kind are the cause of men mistreating women and not valuing them for who they are.

   These advertisements are a goal to being a success to the people who make these advertisements. They gain money from each product is sold by the company, but what these people don’t realize what matters the most is to value and respect woman for who they are and how they look like. Advertisements like these do not bring respect towards anyone.